Post by D.J Cat on Jul 14, 2006 23:02:58 GMT 10
This is the first part of the first chapter of my Cheese Monkeys story I did for English.
I don't have a proper name for the story yet...
Cheese Monkey concept by Pie Man, Bungo Deepdelver and Commander Bob.
Donkey Rabbit original design by Morgan and Pie Man. Further developed by Pie Man, Bungo Deepdelver and Commander Bob.
Donkey Rabbit Concept art here:
channel64.proboards107.com/index.cgi?board=pictures&action=display&thread=1151672792
The whole first chapter is up now.
I looked ahead and saw the towering red rock. This was the famous Ayres Rock I had heard so much about. I rode on another few kilometres through the dusty desert landscape thinking about the task ahead of me. I dismounted my Donkey Rabbit and pulled out my Katana Samurai Sword from the sheath on the left side of my belt. I looked up on top of the rock. I could see the shadowy silhouettes of them in the desert twilight. 100’s of them. God Damn Cheese Monkey’s! About 50cm in height and dangerous in swarms. They were constructing a Psychic Dominator to control the minds of all creatures within a 5000km radius. I loaded up my maghook and looked for a good path up the rock. I spotted one and then turned my head and looked at my faithful Donkey Rabbit. “Wait here Bill” I told him and started hurtling up the rock. It didn’t take long…
I arrived on top to a rather aggressive welcoming committee. In one swift movement I decapitated 10 of them. This captured the attention of just about every Cheese Monkey, and they started to charge at me, some armed with small daggers but many happy to have a go at swarming me unarmed.
Big mistake.
Before they could reach me I pulled a red and white ball out of my pocket. I threw it on the ground in front of me and the ball split open in an explosion of colours for a brief moment and in its place stood an 8 foot tall winged orange dragon like creature which I liked to call Charizard.
“Charizard!” I yelled “Fly around the back of them and wait for my orders!”
He took off slowly and started to circle around, the Cheese Monkey’s not really giving him much notice.
It must have looked unbelievable if anyone could see the sight on top of the rock.
They were on to me. I started hacking in to the front row of them. Little Monkey parts went flying everywhere. My sword was going back and forth slicing and dicing as franticly as I could make it. They started surrounding me, their speed catching me off guard. I put my left Combat boot through the head of one behind me and then quickly ducked and swang my sword around my body in a 180 degree arc, cutting through the bodies of 10 or so in one swipe. I jumped back and held my sword out at full length. They continued to advance. I kicked hard at the front row while slashing all the ones who tried to come at me from the air. Then the armed ones started approaching with their small but sharp daggers. I went for an overhead slice of the nearest one. He raised his dagger and blocked my sword! The force of the hit still made the dagger go through its head but for a second I was stunned at the strength they possessed. Suddenly I was jumped by 4 of them! I jumped back and swiped at them quickly going straight through 3 of them. But the fourth one hit with force and gave me a nasty cut in my left shoulder. I yelled in pain and dropped my sword. Quickly I got past the sharp pain and dived onto the little bastard who cut me. I grabbed his neck with both hands and moved one arm one way and the other the other way. Gooey green blood started spurting out of the body where the head was as if someone was spraying an aerosol can. The body dropped to the ground and I kicked the head as hard as I could. It went about 50 metres. I still had my football skills it seemed…
But I had more problems to worry about. There were still 100 or so of them left and I was unarmed. I looked around for something, and saw a small dagger that had been used against me. I slid in feet first at it and snatched it before it was picked up. It had some weight behind it but was only about 40cm in length. I kept my distance and tried to take them on just a few at a time.
I knew I couldn’t just run through the pack, because they would hack my legs to pieces very quickly. I needed to get my sword back, or I would surely be gone. I smashed another ones head off with a well timed kick while ducking and punishing any airborne attempts with the dagger and some quick moves. I then noticed the Cheese Monkeys were passing my sword back through the pack to the final line which was some bigger looking Cheese Monkeys guarding the 20 metre metallic structure being the Psychic Dominator. Bloody smart arses. This was going to be nearly impossible now. Unless…
“Charizard! ” I screamed out, “Use your fire breath while flying over the top of them!”
This was dangerous but the Cheese Monkeys wouldn’t be able to reach Charizard and it seemed like my only choice. I continued to back away from the Cheese Monkeys, taking them out as they approached me but they were figuring out my strategy. I snatched a Monkey out of the air and ripped the dagger from its hands and flung the little fella hard over my shoulder. I was holding them back a little better now…
At that moment Charizard came soaring over the top of the pack and engulfed them with his burning hot fire breath. The Cheese Monkeys screamed in pain as their limbs and heads caught fire and melted instantaneously. I caught my breath and watched the survivors running around with a look of terror in their eyes as they fell to pieces. They all seemed dead. I quickly run towards the Psychic Dominator, my boots squelching with every step in the bubbling hot cheese. I dropped the daggers and quickly pulled the timed explosive charge out of my right pocket and started to set it.
5 minutes and counting. I placed it at the base of the Psychic Dominator. My job is finally done I can get out of here. I looked at the half crescent moon rising in the distance and then over at my Charizard who was looking tired yet satisfied. I glanced at the hot gooey mess between me and Charizard that just minutes ago was going to kill me. It was silent, and I started walking over to Charizard, the only noise being my footsteps. And then, I heard the sound of a sword being drawn. I swivelled around on the spot and saw a Cheese Monkey dressed in a full black suit. It was one of those famed Ninja Cheese Monkeys. I didn’t realize they were real…and it had my sword!
I started sprinting away as fast as I could with my level of fatigue, heavy boots and sticky terrain. I spotted the 2 daggers I dropped before and kneeled down on the run and swooped them into my hands in one nice grab. The Ninja would catch me before long so I had no choice but to engage in battle. We started to circle around each other and I stared at it looking for a weakness. Before anyone could make a move I threw one of the daggers right at its head. It was dodged with minimal effort, and it advanced at me. The Sword was swung violently at me left and right, all I could do was block them over and over. The attacks weren’t coming any slower or weaker and I was tiring. There was nothing that Charizard could do without crisping me as well so I had to somehow find a way through the defences of this vile creature.
I yelled out to Charizard “If I die, get the hell out of here, just follow Bill…”
He looked at me in a sad way but knew there was nothing that could be done.
I wasn’t done with yet, and I wasn’t going to beat it by blocking like this. I slid in feet first doing a soccer style tackle and disregarding the still hot cheese to take him down. He capitalized on this and swiftly took a chunk out of the hamstring on my right leg.
The pain was unbearable but this gave the opportunity to grab him. I fumbled, but got my hands around the handle of the sword. Its Ninja skills were no match for my strength as I whipped my sword back out of its hands. I did a quick tilt attack as it back-flipped away and took of its right arm. I saw green gooey liquid oozing out, but it made no noise. They were trained not to show signs of weakness. It started sifting through the cheese looking for the daggers of its lost comrades. I could hardly get up, but I knew I had to now or die.
“Charizard get airborne!” I commanded as I got up onto one knee. I looked over at the Ninja and then at Charizard…who was going to get to me first I wondered as I started to stand up while holding my leg, trying to stop the blood flow. The Ninja reached down and pulled out a cheese soaked dagger and held it up in the air triumphantly. I looked over at Charizard, who had taken off and was slowly approaching me and then back at the Ninja who was coming at me at full speed with a look of absolute determination. Using one hand and all the strength left in my body I blocked the Ninja’s advances but he was too quick…he slashed my ankle and I fell to my knees with my arms outstretched…
And latched onto Charizard. I clambered onto his back and just randomly slashed my sword behind us. I forced myself to keep my eyes open, to stay conscious. I was losing to much blood, I was in too much pain.
The Ninja gave chase with full determination. Charizard came to the edge and flew over it. Then he turned down sharply and flew straight down. I quickly put my sword back in the sheath and held on as tight as I could. I looked behind me and stared in terror as I saw the Ninja had jumped off the side and was hurtling down after us. Chances are it had some way of surviving the impact of a couple hundred metres high fall. This was ridiculous. And Charizard wasn’t quick enough to outmanoeuvre it. I would have to jump off at the bottom, and sacrifice myself, otherwise the Ninja would kill us all.
“Charizard, you know what to do!” I yelled over his shoulder, before jumping off a few metres from the ground, pulling out my sword as I hit the ground and holding it above my head watching the bringer of death. We starred at each other, my sword ready to have one last clumsy pathetic swipe. He would land on me within 5 seconds now.
A huge shadow suddenly blocked my view and a second later there was a huge thump to my left. I turned and there was Bill.
He had snatched the Ninja Cheese Monkey out of the air!
Again, I put my sword away, and staggered over to Bill.
“Thanks buddy…” I said in between breaths.
I clambered onto his back with Charizard flying overhead and we started heading south….
I don't have a proper name for the story yet...
Cheese Monkey concept by Pie Man, Bungo Deepdelver and Commander Bob.
Donkey Rabbit original design by Morgan and Pie Man. Further developed by Pie Man, Bungo Deepdelver and Commander Bob.
Donkey Rabbit Concept art here:
channel64.proboards107.com/index.cgi?board=pictures&action=display&thread=1151672792
The whole first chapter is up now.
I looked ahead and saw the towering red rock. This was the famous Ayres Rock I had heard so much about. I rode on another few kilometres through the dusty desert landscape thinking about the task ahead of me. I dismounted my Donkey Rabbit and pulled out my Katana Samurai Sword from the sheath on the left side of my belt. I looked up on top of the rock. I could see the shadowy silhouettes of them in the desert twilight. 100’s of them. God Damn Cheese Monkey’s! About 50cm in height and dangerous in swarms. They were constructing a Psychic Dominator to control the minds of all creatures within a 5000km radius. I loaded up my maghook and looked for a good path up the rock. I spotted one and then turned my head and looked at my faithful Donkey Rabbit. “Wait here Bill” I told him and started hurtling up the rock. It didn’t take long…
I arrived on top to a rather aggressive welcoming committee. In one swift movement I decapitated 10 of them. This captured the attention of just about every Cheese Monkey, and they started to charge at me, some armed with small daggers but many happy to have a go at swarming me unarmed.
Big mistake.
Before they could reach me I pulled a red and white ball out of my pocket. I threw it on the ground in front of me and the ball split open in an explosion of colours for a brief moment and in its place stood an 8 foot tall winged orange dragon like creature which I liked to call Charizard.
“Charizard!” I yelled “Fly around the back of them and wait for my orders!”
He took off slowly and started to circle around, the Cheese Monkey’s not really giving him much notice.
It must have looked unbelievable if anyone could see the sight on top of the rock.
They were on to me. I started hacking in to the front row of them. Little Monkey parts went flying everywhere. My sword was going back and forth slicing and dicing as franticly as I could make it. They started surrounding me, their speed catching me off guard. I put my left Combat boot through the head of one behind me and then quickly ducked and swang my sword around my body in a 180 degree arc, cutting through the bodies of 10 or so in one swipe. I jumped back and held my sword out at full length. They continued to advance. I kicked hard at the front row while slashing all the ones who tried to come at me from the air. Then the armed ones started approaching with their small but sharp daggers. I went for an overhead slice of the nearest one. He raised his dagger and blocked my sword! The force of the hit still made the dagger go through its head but for a second I was stunned at the strength they possessed. Suddenly I was jumped by 4 of them! I jumped back and swiped at them quickly going straight through 3 of them. But the fourth one hit with force and gave me a nasty cut in my left shoulder. I yelled in pain and dropped my sword. Quickly I got past the sharp pain and dived onto the little bastard who cut me. I grabbed his neck with both hands and moved one arm one way and the other the other way. Gooey green blood started spurting out of the body where the head was as if someone was spraying an aerosol can. The body dropped to the ground and I kicked the head as hard as I could. It went about 50 metres. I still had my football skills it seemed…
But I had more problems to worry about. There were still 100 or so of them left and I was unarmed. I looked around for something, and saw a small dagger that had been used against me. I slid in feet first at it and snatched it before it was picked up. It had some weight behind it but was only about 40cm in length. I kept my distance and tried to take them on just a few at a time.
I knew I couldn’t just run through the pack, because they would hack my legs to pieces very quickly. I needed to get my sword back, or I would surely be gone. I smashed another ones head off with a well timed kick while ducking and punishing any airborne attempts with the dagger and some quick moves. I then noticed the Cheese Monkeys were passing my sword back through the pack to the final line which was some bigger looking Cheese Monkeys guarding the 20 metre metallic structure being the Psychic Dominator. Bloody smart arses. This was going to be nearly impossible now. Unless…
“Charizard! ” I screamed out, “Use your fire breath while flying over the top of them!”
This was dangerous but the Cheese Monkeys wouldn’t be able to reach Charizard and it seemed like my only choice. I continued to back away from the Cheese Monkeys, taking them out as they approached me but they were figuring out my strategy. I snatched a Monkey out of the air and ripped the dagger from its hands and flung the little fella hard over my shoulder. I was holding them back a little better now…
At that moment Charizard came soaring over the top of the pack and engulfed them with his burning hot fire breath. The Cheese Monkeys screamed in pain as their limbs and heads caught fire and melted instantaneously. I caught my breath and watched the survivors running around with a look of terror in their eyes as they fell to pieces. They all seemed dead. I quickly run towards the Psychic Dominator, my boots squelching with every step in the bubbling hot cheese. I dropped the daggers and quickly pulled the timed explosive charge out of my right pocket and started to set it.
5 minutes and counting. I placed it at the base of the Psychic Dominator. My job is finally done I can get out of here. I looked at the half crescent moon rising in the distance and then over at my Charizard who was looking tired yet satisfied. I glanced at the hot gooey mess between me and Charizard that just minutes ago was going to kill me. It was silent, and I started walking over to Charizard, the only noise being my footsteps. And then, I heard the sound of a sword being drawn. I swivelled around on the spot and saw a Cheese Monkey dressed in a full black suit. It was one of those famed Ninja Cheese Monkeys. I didn’t realize they were real…and it had my sword!
I started sprinting away as fast as I could with my level of fatigue, heavy boots and sticky terrain. I spotted the 2 daggers I dropped before and kneeled down on the run and swooped them into my hands in one nice grab. The Ninja would catch me before long so I had no choice but to engage in battle. We started to circle around each other and I stared at it looking for a weakness. Before anyone could make a move I threw one of the daggers right at its head. It was dodged with minimal effort, and it advanced at me. The Sword was swung violently at me left and right, all I could do was block them over and over. The attacks weren’t coming any slower or weaker and I was tiring. There was nothing that Charizard could do without crisping me as well so I had to somehow find a way through the defences of this vile creature.
I yelled out to Charizard “If I die, get the hell out of here, just follow Bill…”
He looked at me in a sad way but knew there was nothing that could be done.
I wasn’t done with yet, and I wasn’t going to beat it by blocking like this. I slid in feet first doing a soccer style tackle and disregarding the still hot cheese to take him down. He capitalized on this and swiftly took a chunk out of the hamstring on my right leg.
The pain was unbearable but this gave the opportunity to grab him. I fumbled, but got my hands around the handle of the sword. Its Ninja skills were no match for my strength as I whipped my sword back out of its hands. I did a quick tilt attack as it back-flipped away and took of its right arm. I saw green gooey liquid oozing out, but it made no noise. They were trained not to show signs of weakness. It started sifting through the cheese looking for the daggers of its lost comrades. I could hardly get up, but I knew I had to now or die.
“Charizard get airborne!” I commanded as I got up onto one knee. I looked over at the Ninja and then at Charizard…who was going to get to me first I wondered as I started to stand up while holding my leg, trying to stop the blood flow. The Ninja reached down and pulled out a cheese soaked dagger and held it up in the air triumphantly. I looked over at Charizard, who had taken off and was slowly approaching me and then back at the Ninja who was coming at me at full speed with a look of absolute determination. Using one hand and all the strength left in my body I blocked the Ninja’s advances but he was too quick…he slashed my ankle and I fell to my knees with my arms outstretched…
And latched onto Charizard. I clambered onto his back and just randomly slashed my sword behind us. I forced myself to keep my eyes open, to stay conscious. I was losing to much blood, I was in too much pain.
The Ninja gave chase with full determination. Charizard came to the edge and flew over it. Then he turned down sharply and flew straight down. I quickly put my sword back in the sheath and held on as tight as I could. I looked behind me and stared in terror as I saw the Ninja had jumped off the side and was hurtling down after us. Chances are it had some way of surviving the impact of a couple hundred metres high fall. This was ridiculous. And Charizard wasn’t quick enough to outmanoeuvre it. I would have to jump off at the bottom, and sacrifice myself, otherwise the Ninja would kill us all.
“Charizard, you know what to do!” I yelled over his shoulder, before jumping off a few metres from the ground, pulling out my sword as I hit the ground and holding it above my head watching the bringer of death. We starred at each other, my sword ready to have one last clumsy pathetic swipe. He would land on me within 5 seconds now.
A huge shadow suddenly blocked my view and a second later there was a huge thump to my left. I turned and there was Bill.
He had snatched the Ninja Cheese Monkey out of the air!
Again, I put my sword away, and staggered over to Bill.
“Thanks buddy…” I said in between breaths.
I clambered onto his back with Charizard flying overhead and we started heading south….